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英検2級英作文 周りのことについて、何を思っているか?

勉強してみても、できているのか出来ていないのか、わからないのが英作文。
同僚のネイティブの先生に添削してもらったものと。ネットの添削サイトを使って書いたものとを載せてみます。
勉強の参考にしてみてくださいね。
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まず英検2級の英作文過去問3つを解いてみました。
ネットで、いくつかの文を参考にしたものも交じっています。
書いたものを同僚に訂正してもらったものが、以下の文です。

TOPIC
Today, more and more young people are starting their own companies. Do you think this is a good idea?

I think it is a good idea for young people to start their own companies. The first reason is that young people can get various experience if they do so. For example, they learn how to meet needs. They can also acquire skills on how to cooperate with emplyees.The second reason is that they will have freedom. THis is because they can set their own working hours and holidays. Therefore, I think it is a good idea for young people to start their own companies.

TOPIC
It is often said that people today use too much electricity. Do you agree with this opinion?

I agree. I think that people today use too much electricity. First, these days people have many electronic devices need a lot of electricity. And our lives rely on electricity compleately. For example, cooking, doing laundry, cleaning and lighting. Nowadays it is impossible to live without electricity. Second, the environment has been affected by using too much electrisity. One of the most important problem is destruction of ozon layer. Some creature are in dnager of due to global warming so we should try not to use too much electricity.

TOPIC
Some people say that the number of cars in cities should be limited. Do you agree with this idea?

Yes, I agree. I think that the number of cars in cities should be limited, and I have two reasons. The first reason is that the environment has been affected by harmful gases from the cars. Air become worse by increase in the number of the cars. The second reason is that the working out opportunities are decreasing wihe increasing cars. It is not good for health. So we should betterr walk on foot or use bicycles for health. Therefore, I think that the number of cars in cities should be limited.

また、同僚の意見を追加してくれていたので、その文章も載せますね。

Many cars in the city mean traffic jam which means people are going to take more time travelling that it would take if we used publictransport or bicycles.


以下はネット添削です。
5月30日は”ごみ0の日”、そして5月31日は”世界禁煙デー”だそうなので、こちらについて、少し意見を書いてみました。

TOPIC:gabage

Thease days people buy many tools. For example, if TV is not broken, some people exchange a new one. And also some people have two or three cars and cell phones. Then people waste foods. Stores sell a lot of delicatessen and the rest of delicatessen is thrown away. That is not so good. There is too much food around us.


TOPIC: smoking

If people smoke, they spend sometimes and money. That is waste I think. Moreover, smoking causes illness as lung cancer. The hurmful smoke also affects people who don't smoke even children. People should better stop smoking for health.


内容はないよー、というような、たいしたことのない文章ですみません。内容自体は点数に関係ないとのことなので、許して。正しい文法で文章が書けるかどうかが点数になるそうです。
それにしても、文法も2級を受けるレベルの文章はまったく書けない。中学生レベルです。いや小学生か。


英語の先生から、英語が話せても、まったくすごいことではない、と言われました。
確かに英語を話せることで、できることの幅が広がります。
ですが、日本語にしろ、英語にしろ、物事をどう考えているか、それをどう伝えるか、それが大切ということです。

日々、のほほ~んと過ごしている私に足りない部分だなあ。

いよいよ明日です。がんばろーー(^^)/